The end does sum-up, I think--and makes what comes before un-puzzled in retrospect.
I love your images, CL. And I'm not much of a poetry critiquer, one way or the other. A note: it seemed less smooth than most your write, disjointed in rhythm. Intentional?
The smoke and mirrors is good for the flow, and picture. Without it, the line falls dead on made-up.
In the end, it felt disjointed--as if it didn't catch itself fully. I haven't the least idea why. ^_^
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